Proposal Rough Outline

Savannah Ballard

Hem Paudel

English 101-17

Nov 9^th

Audience: Dean of Students office, this is the best place I feel to direct my proposal because it deals with the overall well being of all students and the foods they consume in relevance to nutrition content.

Introducing problem: As a college freshman, I am fully aware of the dreaded freshman 15. We have all heard of students gaining around fifteen pounds during the transition from high school to college. When you walk around campus and are looking for healthy foods, you must look through the abundance of very unhealthy food, such as papa johns, Chinese, fried chicken, pizza, burgers to places such as subway, where if you are very cautious about what you put on your sub, is one of the healthiest options available. I am a student who loves to cook and tries to eat healthy. If the University of Louisville would put a small grocery store on campus with raw whole foods (meat, produce, fruits, ect) where students can swipe their meal card to pay, then the dreaded weight gain could be stopped and the University would be a much healthier place.

Problem: Not enough whole foods are available on campus (gather a list of what restaurants and stores on campus carry whole foods that are healthy.)

Solution: Add a small store with produce and whole foods (Gain money from the excess amounts students have on the card every semester, the University of Louisville is a high achieving academic and athletic school, which gains plenty of income to expand on stores such as the nest)

Problem/objection: Too much money on meal card, forcing students to binge eat unhealthy food to avoid losing that money

Solution/response: Allow students to use meal plan at places such as the store mentioned above or at local stores such as Kroger

Problem/objection: What is available on campus is too expensive (the nest has fresh fruits in a very small case but one single container of strawberries or grapes costs 7$, where at the local Kroger it would only cost 3$.)

Solution/response: Allow the excessive amount of money students must place on their meal plans at the beginning of the year to be used up in places such as the nest, but for students with a limited budget, like most college students are, allow reasonable priced whole, natural and healthy foods. (Allowing stores like Kroger to use meal plans flex points to buy food, swipe like all SAC restaurants do.)

--Survey students in my classes of whether or not they would like a healthy option store to buy whole foods at, and if they feel it is a necessary step to avoiding the freshman 15.--

Assignment 4

     The purposes of Assignment Four are to give us practice writing a proposal, give us practice integrating statistics and evidences, introduce us to design principles such as using headings, and continue to improve your ability to respond respectfully to those who disagree with my view point. I believe that to make assignment 4 more clear, the statements of how to lay out the paper such as with headings or not, or how it needs to be formatted. I am not really confused about much. I think the main question I have is do I need to use I. II. III. with headings for each point.

November 6th Proposal Assignment

Savannah Ballard
Eng 101-17
Nov 6-14

Question 1)
The difference in a policy proposal and a practical proposal are:
          -in policy proposals the writer offers a broad plan of action to solve major problems that are social, economic or political affecting the common good. An example would be that universities should allow healthy foods to be purchased on meal plans from a store on campus.
         - in practical proposals the writers point is narrow, local and concrete. They use very specific information of how a solution will affect the problem. An example would be NAS because it has very specific solutions to limit the cases reported yearly.

Question 2)
The three main phases are:
1) description of a problem- must convince the audience a problem exists
2) proposed solution- show ways or a single way to solve the problem
3) justification for the proposed solution- look for the best "pressure points", some arguments require lots of development and some require minimal amounts.

Question 3)
Topic 1-- High schools should pass out free contraceptives
Clause: Because this would promote safer sex, leading to fewer unplanned pregnancies.
Topic 2-- Marijuana should be legalized
Clause: Because the state could heavily tax it making money which can be used to benefit the common people. Things such as roads and bridges could be repaired with the money.

causal argument outline

Savannah Ballard

English 101       10-27-14

Causal Outline

Introduction: Neonatal Abstinence Syndrome or NAS, is a condition that is incredibly painful to an infant; it brings upon many dangerous symptoms as well. Born to mothers that used drugs while pregnant, these innocent newborns are forced to battle just to live in their first few days, weeks or months of life. NAS is a preventable condition that must be controlled and quickly, as the rates of newborns with NAS is climbing annually. The selfishness of these mothers who use drugs while carrying a child causes this painful condition, known as NAS, but even after being discharged from the hospital, these young babies are not out of harm’s way. Newborns with Neonatal Abstinence Syndrome are at a higher risk of abuse due to the uncontrollable high pitched crying that cannot be soothed, caused by the drug withdrawal the child is experiencing.

Topic one: NAS is caused by mothers who use drugs while pregnant. This is not only a condition that leads to being born in withdrawal, but it leads to many other side effects, such as birth defects and a higher risk of abuse.

Topic Two: Newborns who develop NAS have a higher risk of abuse because they tend to have a high pitched cry that cannot be soothed or stopped.

Topic Three: The lack of punishment in our state for putting a child into this much harm is not severe enough, which leads to a rising rate of NAS babies being born each year.

Topic Four: If prevention programs were put into place, mothers could have somewhere to turn for help because they would be protected by the law for seeking medical attention.

Opposing Views: Neonatal Abstinence Syndrome is not a serious problem that needs to be addressed urgently or have money spent on prevention programs. What is more urgent than a newborn baby fighting for survival moments after birth? The money that is being used for post-natal care should be re- routed to help fight and prevent NAS rates from climbing more.

Conclusion: NAS is a serious problem that puts children at a higher risk for abuse, as well as causes many birth defects and life threatening symptoms, such as frequent seizures. This problem is large enough and needs to be fixed before more newborns are subjected to this needless pain. Child abuse is a serious problem, we can make a difference, and we must.

Assignment three:Causal argument

1. What are the purposes of Assignment 3?

1. What statements do you think could be added to make Assignment 3 clearer?

1. What are you confused about in this assignment?

The purpose of Assignment 3 are to make us think about a topic that is somewhat controversial and to persuade an audience to believe the cause or the consequences linked to that particular topic. This paper will also allow us to practice using quotes to support a point.

I think that to make assignment 3 clearer, the following statements could be addressed:

-The topic does or does not have to be controversial or well known as long as it relates back to you or your life in some way.

I am confused about whether we are actually attempting to propose solutions or if we are stating consequences or saying A caused B which caused C.

Causal Argument Assignment 3 10-22-14

Savannah Ballard

Eng 101

Hem Paudel

After reading the two papers, I found “Marriage shows the way out of poverty” to be more persuasive. This article had statistics to back up each of its reasons on why marriage will help people get out of poverty. This article also came at the topic from several angles, not only did he mention that marriage will help poverty, he mentions how having children after being married, getting a job and graduating high school all make a person more likely to not live in poverty. The second article “When roommates were random” is not very persuasive. This article only mentions marriage as a small side note at the end of the paper in a few sentences. Unlike the first paper, this article doesn’t contain any facts or statistics to draw in the reader.

I believe the writer of “Marriage shows the way out of poverty” does have a few fallacies. Not mentioning the opposing view that marriage isn’t for everyone is a big problem. Some people just don’t get along well with others and don’t want to be married, or they are so tied up with their career that they haven’t had time to meet a potential marriage partner; these people can still be just as successful or more than someone who is married. The lack of opposing view in this article doesn’t bring down the persuasiveness of what is written, but including it would increase the overall strength of the paper. The second paper, “When roommates were random” has some larger problems. Not mentioning marriage until the last few sentences is a very big problem, as it doesn’t allow the reader to know what the actual point of the paper is. The second problem with this paper is that they don’t use any statistics or facts to prove that they are right; this really effects the persuasiveness in my opinion.

Causal Argument

Causal Argument

Topic 1) Neonatal Abstinence Syndrome (NAS)

Neonatal abstinence syndrome is a very serious problem especially here in Kentucky. NAS is when infants are born addicted to drugs because the mother used while she was pregnant. This causes painful withdraw where these infants are kept in the neonatal intensive care unit and given pain medications or sometimes methadone to ease the effects of withdraw on the little ones. Mothers who use drugs during pregnancy cause this terrible and painful syndrome on innocent newborns.

Topic 2) Involvement increases GPA and grades

Being involved in life on and off campus is something we are told from the moment we step on campus for orientation. We are told that being involved can be so beneficial, not only in terms of GPA, but it can lead to more school pride, connections leading to future jobs and a much higher chance to have good grades. When you feel purpose and pride in an organization, it makes you much more likely to work harder in the classroom in order to stay eligible for that organization. Also, being involved makes great connections that can really effect life later and the types of jobs you get. GPA boost is a great benefit of being involved.

Causal Argument

Savannah Ballard
Eng 101
10-16-14

The three types of causal arguments are speculations about possible causes, arguments for an unexpected or surprising cause, and predictions of consequences. In the first type of argument, speculations about possible causes, the arguer will think of reasons that particular incident could have occurred. The second type of causal argument, arguments for an unexpected or surprising cause, the arguer not only considers several potential causes to an incident, but they try to persuade the readers to see the plausibility of a surprising cause. The last type of causal argument, predictions of consequences, will predict the consequences of current, planned or future events.

                My first causal claim is, Using drugs or alcohol while pregnant may be a contributing cause to infants being born with NAS because the rise in NAS cases has drastically increased over the last several years.  My second claim is, Making poor and irrational choices may be a contributing factor in unplanned teenage pregnancies because teenagers are more apt to make a decision for immediate gain rather than considering long term consequences.

            Induction is used when a causal link cannot be explained directly. This method makes us infer a general conclusion based on a limited number of specific cases. An example of this includes eating dark chocolate and getting a migraine but not when you eat white chocolate, so the dark chocolate must be causing your headaches. Another example of induction is if a woman experienced painful heartburn after eating an egg roll but not after eating strawberries, she could conclude that the egg roll caused her heartburn. 

Assignment two: Man of Steel Evaluation Works Cited

Works Cited

Calhoun, David. “Time out Says.” Time Out. 2013 July 20. Web. 2014 September 24.                  <http://www.timeout.com/london/film/man-of-steel?intcid=leader>.

Nashawaty, Chris. “Man of Steel.” Entertainment Weekly. 2013 June 25. Web. 2014 September 24.                          < http://www.ew.com/ew/article/0,,20687777,00.html >.

Roeper, Richard. “’Man of Steel’ beset by Kryptonite.” Sun-Times. 2013 June 11. Web. 2014 September                24.

< http://www.suntimes.com/entertainment/movies/20677169-421/man-of-steel-beset-by-   kryptonite.html#.VCswkbktDIV >.

Seitz, Matt Zoller. “Man of Steel.” Roger Ebert. 2013 June 14. Web. 2014 September 24.

                < http://www.rogerebert.com/reviews/man-of-steel-2013 >.

Patches, Matt. “Review: Man of Steel.” Film.com. 2013 June 10. Web. 2014 September 24.

                < http://www.film.com/movies/man-of-steel-review >.

Leyland, Mathew. “Man of Steel.” Total Film. 2013 June 17. Web. 2014 September 24.

                < http://www.totalfilm.com/reviews/cinema/man-of-steel >.

Assignment Two: Man of Steel Evaluation Introduction

Savannah Ballard

Man of Steel Introduction

          Released in June of 2013, Man of Steel was a box office hit. Directed by Zach Snider, this movie has all the qualities I look for in a good action and adventure movie. Man of Steel has action and strenuous battles that hold the viewer’s attention as well as having the adventurous elements of Kal-El’s journey and how he was shaped and led to be the superhero he is today. These are the two most important criteria for an action/adventure movie in my opinion. If a movie, such as Man of Steel, meet these two main criteria, I would classify it as a good movie. The next two criteria are more of a support system than the overall movie. This movie has two sub categories that we must consider when evaluating it, Sci-Fi and Fantasy. Fulfilling these categories requires accurate but believable technology advances that deal with science, and the movie must make the audience think about real world consequences to the fantastic character and their actions. Man of Steel is a good action/adventure movie because it meets all four of these criteria. 

Assigment 2 9/25 Eng 101

Savannah Ballard

English 101

                 The artifact that I have chosen for Assignment 2 is a television show. This show is two years old, originally airing in 2012, and it has a similar number of good (5) and bad (5) reviews. Chicago Fire is about fire-fighters and paramedics who work at Firehouse 51 in Chicago, IL. This show is classified as a drama, and more specifically as an Action-Adventure Drama. The critics also had mixed reviews about this show, presenting their critiques and praises in the 13 mixed reviews on metacritic.com. An example of a review where the critic said that Chicago Fire was a good show is from the Los Angeles Times Robert Lloyd. He stated that “In a world without cable dramas, Chicago Fire would be considered television at its more compelling and realistic. As it is, it walks the line between shameless entertainment--hot guys, hot girls, the fires within, the fires without--and intelligent storytelling.” As well as good reviews, this show was given some bad reviews such as David Wiegand’s review at the San Francisco Chronicle. He said that “Wolf either doesn't know what to do with his characters while they're waiting around for a fire to break out, or thinks their personal stories should be the dominant element in his new series. They could be, if only those stories weren't ripped from the book of overused clichés.” Not only did Chicago Fire receive good and bad reviews, it had mixed reviews. Here is an example of a mixed review by Hitfix’s Alan Sepinwall, “There's no character you haven't seen before. More importantly, there's no character that hasn't been done much, much better elsewhere.” He sounds more displeased with the show than pleased but he gave it a mixed review. This show can be found on the internet, at multiple sites. I believe Chicago Fire is a great Action-Adventure Drama because it has multiple high intensity action situations per episode, a plot with many twists and turns that add depth to the show, and each character develops to make life and death situations that are very difficult.

 

 

Assignment 2 for English 101

Savannah Ballard
9/23/14

       The purposes of assignment 2 are to improve my ability to refute or concede respectfully arguments that differ from my own point of view, give me practice writing a thesis-driven and criteria matched essay, and to give me practice paraphrasing and quoting other authors. I thing to that adding examples of how the criteria fit the example essay would help me understand how the grading will take place better. I am confused about how we will choose a movie to write about; are we choosing a category and arguing the category or arguing whether a movie is good or not?

Possible Advertisements for Assignment 1

 

 

1.This ad appeals to the audience's emotion because it boldy states that by using Kleenex tissues, you are destroying ancient forests.
2. This ad shows good use of ethos because it has a credible source listed on the Kleenex ad.
3. This ad uses visual appeal because it catches the audience's eye with the logs creating the box of tissues, which represents all the forest killed to make that very box.
4.This ad appeals to the viewers emotion because it lists three simple steps, which we would do without a second thought, to killing a forest forever and how quickly nature can be destroyed.

 

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1. This ad appeals to the audience's emotion because it uses one of the most commonly known weapons, a gun, and loads it with cigarettes instead of bullets, showing how deadly smoking is.

2. This ad uses logical appeal because it lists off 12 potentially deadly side effects of smoking allowing its audience to see the harsh reality that comes along with a pack of cigarettes.

3. This ad appeals to logos and pathos fairly well, but struggles in showing good use of ethos because the wesite where the information was gathered doesn't appear on the ad so we don't know the credibility of the source.

4. This ad appeals to logos because it asks a question that most people will want to answer, "Smoking kills, so why bother starting?" If someone answers this question with a reason why, it will most likely be answered with a look over to the list as to why no one should start smoking.



 

1. This ad appeals to the audience's emotion because it shows a man in a before and after picture of his weight loss. This is a common struggle that a lot of views can relate with.

2. This ad has good use of ethos because we see the credibility of the restaurant presented on the ad, Subway, which is a sub shop known world wide.

3. This ad appeals to logos because it presents the information as to how he lost the weight by eating subway. He lost 245 lbs on 2 subs a day, which have 6 grams of fat or less.

4. The ad may appeal to ethos because Jared's story is posted on the ad. Doing this draws in the audience and makes them want to know what they can do to achieve results like Jared.

Assignment 1: ad analysis

The purpose of assignment one is to make us think about an advertisement in a way that defines classic structure, ethos, logos, pathos and karios. I think that to make this assignment clearer the examples could be added to the page as well as adding an example of an argument being evaluated and how each is done well or not. I am confused about how to pick an advertisement and what exactly we are doing to it. I don't understand if we are evaluating it in terms of how they show logos, ethos, pathos and karios, or if we are explaining what they are and how effective they are in the ad.

Human Organs for Sale

During my evaluation of the two essays responding to "Human Organs for Sale?", I saw a clear pattern. Both arguments said that this was a persuasive argument like the writer had intended it to be. I think the second essay was better put together and met more of the evaluation criteria.

While reading the first essay, I found some places where the evaluation criteria were not met. According to the criteria, the essay must have a precise focus, which this essay did not do very well. The writer of essay 1 didn't give any of his own ideals or elaboration in his body paragraphs; he simply placed direct quotes into his essay, one after another. This essay was organized in the classical structure and followed it pretty well. The author didn't have a hook in his paper, which did not draw me in to read it. The flaws in this argument were: no elaboration after quotes in the body, he didn't really develop a conclusion that ties back to the introduction, and the introduction wasn't very background or detail oriented.

The second essay was much better to read and evaluate. It was accurate in all of its quoting and the quotes seemed to fit logically where they were placed. This author also follows the classic argument structure by connecting the introduction to the conclusion and also by listing out the authors evidences for the reasoning on how each piece of evidence supports the topic sentences and thesis. This author used much better grammar. Although the author states that the argument is persuasive to the website views, the author says that it isn't going to be accepted by any Christians. By including this, I feel that the author specifies how it appeals or doesn't appeal to viewers. In the second essay's conclusion, the author lists out that "...who take a compassionate view of the sacredness of human life..". This makes her conclusion and paper in general seem unfair and biased to an opinion created about the readers.

 I preferred the second piece over the first because it was better written and had fewer errors overall.

Gordon Adams Assignment 8/27

Savannah Ballard

English 101

August 26, 2014

 

After reading the Gordon Adams’ petition, I agree that a math credit will not better this man in any way. As an accomplished adult, he knows what his job does and does not require. College algebra is not one of the those requirements working in the field of tribal law. Generally, a math credit, for any degree, is to give a student a well-rounded education, but in this case, it will set back a student attempting to enter law school. Instead of benefiting Gordon, this general education requirement will be a hindrance on gaining his law degree.

            I understand that universities have policies to enforce, but some specific situations require bending of those rules. I agree with the university that students, under normal circumstances, should be required to take a general education math class. In our society, a job can be changed in an instant. When things go wrong and you need to switch majors or careers, you need to have some math in your background for a back up plan. In this instance, the student has his career lined up and will receive no benefit from taking this math course required by the University. The gap in his education should be filled with a course useful to him. College is about gaining an education; this requirement will slow this particular student down instead of broadening his knowledge and skill set. Mr. Adams’ should be allowed to replace his math credit for the good of his education.